It's always more interesting to correct run-on sentences and comma splices if you like the story to start with. The following sentences have been lifted and butchered from Meet the Malones, by Lenora Mattingly Weber.
The very way he said it chilled Mary Fred’s ardour momentarily they’d have to watch that Johnny didn’t do the marketing.
“We don’t want a slipshod home, we want one that’s a pleasure for folks to come to, and we want to keep it open to soldiers and all who don’t have one of their own.”
When Mary Fred reached home that evening she found Hattie taking care of the baby, Nonna had taken Elizabeth to a tea.
Nonna and Elizabeth returned a little later they had that dressed-up and flushed prettiness that goes with partying.
“We all lean on you and depend on you, I never would have thought I could do this room over if you hadn’t told me I could.”
Mary Fred’s feet felt cold at the foot of the bed, she crooked her knees and pulled them into the warmer area.
“They couldn’t go to a Home anyway because of Brother’s spots, he’s in your bed.”
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